Damn.
Goddamn.
So distant
So far
Watching in adoration
Though I don't really know who you are
Damn.
I've been down this road
Too many times
Ending up writing countless poems
With sadly pathetic rhymes.
Damn.
It's hard to say
"Love"
And of it,
Frankly, I've had quite enough.
I refused to admit
So many times
But of course,
It's half sexual.
Goddamn.
Goddamn.
Painful yet it is
To admit,
I love you and hate you
Quite a bit.
Love for your beauty
I love you and hate you
Quite a bit.
Love for your beauty
And hate for it, too
Love for your kindness
And the way you do what you do
I hate you because you're unattainable,
I love you because I'm insane,
I'm insane because I hope and wish
That you would feel the same.
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i thoroughly enjoyed the promisuity of your poem, showed how its true sexual desires drive the forcefulness of the poem, yet it so light and inspiring discussing the true love people feel every day oh so much.
<3 ananananomyous
After looking over it a coupe tomes i think that the 'intended meaning' was pretty much amazing. however, i don't think that this was exactly your best work. The meaning was clear but the overall connotation of the scheme and the mood didn't have enough power or stronghold with the reader.
I think that if you tried again tho (touching upon the same themes and motifs) but had a different wording +layout it could very well be your best yet because it delves into the emotional state very well.
as of yet may fave of your poems is still "Understatement" because it's so cute, innocent, and to the point, along with a very powerful simpleness which ties into to tone of the poem.
I hope that helped! <3 <3 <3
i reallly liked this!!!!!! wowowowwowow!
*sigh* ugh your poems are really awesome nabeed!! =)
you should publish them in our school newspaper!
-michelle
Thanks, by the way.
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